Poetic Musings: Leaf Pile Haiku by Scott Mason
leaf pile rakerleaf pile kickertwo autumns Third Place, 2016 Porad Haiku Award Scott Mason Commentary: Thematically and structurally speaking, Scott's haiku alludes to the following one:I go you stay --two autumns Masaoka Shiki (often wrongly attributed to Yosa Buson)It's easy for readers, who have front yards/gardens or backyards needed to be cleaned up fallen leaves and blossoms during autumn, to visualize this scene: Dad is out to rake leaves/L1, while his kid(s) follow(s) behind, kicking through the leaf pile/L2 and scattering the leaves to the autumn wind.And as time continues to move forward, the next autumn will eventually arrive/L3. The same things, raking and kicking leaves/Ls 1&2, will happen again.Here is my response/much serious???? haiku:rounds of shovelling snow, rounds of clearing windrows ...two blizzard dumpsFYI: CBC News, Feb. 17: Toronto, Montreal tackle towering snow piles after back-to-back storms
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leaf pile raker
leaf pile kicker
two autumns
Third Place, 2016 Porad Haiku Award
Scott Mason
Commentary: Thematically and structurally speaking, Scott's haiku alludes to the following one:
I go
you stay --
two autumns
Masaoka Shiki (often wrongly attributed to Yosa Buson)
It's easy for readers, who have front yards/gardens or backyards needed to be cleaned up fallen leaves and blossoms during autumn, to visualize this scene: Dad is out to rake leaves/L1, while his kid(s) follow(s) behind, kicking through the leaf pile/L2 and scattering the leaves to the autumn wind.
And as time continues to move forward, the next autumn will eventually arrive/L3. The same things, raking and kicking leaves/Ls 1&2, will happen again.
Here is my response/much serious???? haiku:
rounds of shovelling snow,
rounds of clearing windrows ...
two blizzard dumps
FYI: CBC News, Feb. 17: Toronto, Montreal tackle towering snow piles after back-to-back storms
